December 7, 2004
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Scrutiny
Watched
And scrutinized
Unknown
Unseen
Inventoried
Calculated
An uninvited
Invasion
Weighed
And measured
Judge
And jury
Summed up
And served up
Displayed without
Consent
Privacy
Denied
By the all
Gazing eye
Your ticket
Please
And your
Entry fee
Without
Which
You
Trespass
Slandering
Staining
Hurting
Accusing
This mirrored
Gaze
Belongs
To me
And the
Accounting
Is my own
Today
Comments (4)
Dueling poetics today. I like it. You know what is cool though, you can almost read it down or side to side. It works both ways.
lisa
It does work both ways I agree with Lisa…if I am forced to pick one versus the other I lean slightly towards the left side being the better of the pair…
I rather like the right. The ticket thing grabbed my attention. Interesting form: short lines but not short on emotion packed diction.
you need to hurry back..*smile*