Dear Andreas,

Although it’s hard to say what to “do” with something like this, which seems more like an “exercise in poetry” than “poetry itself”, I didn’t find the actual poem too “holey moley” at all. (I see where you’re coming from, because it references God in the third to last line of the second stanza.)  For rhythm’s sake, I’d shorten “I am” to a contraction in the 6th line of the first stanza, it just seems to want to lose a syllable. I think the last stanza stands on it’s own as a poem. I think the rhyming couplets make the poem a fantastic “exercise”. (I rarely write rhyme when doing these “acrostics” (I didn’t even know the term existed till another poet used the terminology in a comment on a Poetry Group last  year.)

Bravo. I haven’t yet written any poetry this year, but that’s because the first of the year is usually reserved for another in my “Outline for Existence” series. The link takes you to the first poem in that series, written as the “Poem for the New Year 2003″. The next “chapter” is called “Politics and Society” and has been brewing in my head for a year or so.

Michael F. Nyiri,  poet, philosopher, fool

P.S. Thanks for your comments and support on my ElectricPoetry group.