January 20, 2005
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Who am I
Just who do I think I am
Flinching in the face of honesty
Ego flailing tentacles of wounded pride
Reeling in my self-righteous insecurity
Just who do I think I am
That I don’t warrant criticism
Have I arrived at evolution’s destiny
Gazing at the silvery mirror of perfectionism
Just who do I think I am
When someone tries to raise the bar
Do I cry foul; run and hide
Or do I strive to stay on par
Just who do I think I am
That I don’t deserve what I dish out
This generous slice of humble pie
Am I just ugly pride and fear throughout
Just who do I think I am
That I reject a simple truth
An honest gift from deep respect
Out of uncertainty retained from youth
Comments (15)
Great poem! I can tell it was born of a lot of introspection. One little nit, third from last line… change “simply” to “simple” (or change “a” to “as”) … haha, I’ll send you a bill for editorial services
i really like this one. “just who do i think i am” can be so many different questions all in one, and i think you hit most of them on the head. i also like this because i can watch your style evolve a bit here… its looking good. keep exploring! liberate thyself from prescribed structure! scratch thyself and pick thy nose and write poetry about it! woooo!! and while you’re at it, cut me a slice of that humble pie…
you have brought me to a stand here
damn…have u read this aloud..if not please do
I sit here smiling and beaming…I am in awe of your words
in awe…I *smile*
most reflective
This is it. You have broken down the barriers and arrived (poetically speaking). I love it, really. I’m not one of those “nice poem” people, as you know. Neither is my xanga-spawn and she likes it too. You have some amazing phrases here. I feel it. It’s direct and artistic at the same time. It’s simple and hard-hitting, yet has incredible depth, especially in light of the fact that you’re a guy and as you frequently tell me, all you guys are completely simple and emotionally non-complex and only need two things to survive. This contradicts that and you can’t get me to think otherwise, no matter what you do. So there.
Nice job today! Hope you’re enjoying the Daily Haiku.
in response to your wonderful list of links for me to visit, i had to take my time to prepare a proper response. i have carefully studied each website and filtered out its educational worth, and i have thus decided that satan is the way to go. i thank you for your help in bringing me to this point. praise the great lucifer! wooo! let’s go burn things and take people’s souls!!!!
hehehehhee
hmmm
there are shadows in darkness
especially doorways babe
that was an invitation to come
to the light
I *blush*
hey thanks for the comment.
i think the key to girls, is to get one that apreciates in her value to you over the years at least at the same rate as a classic car. all other girls are not worth it. i’m sorry about your Camero.
and this poem is great. very well put.
-Xav
Oh, that is cool that you liked that song. The band is Strangecloud. Fred Wheeler also runs Indie Journal the website. He’s published a lot of my poetry and drawings over the years. Fantastic musician and songwriter, as you now know.
Hmmm, instead of rocks now that you’re older you could throw some love at girls. They might go for that. Compliments is another good one. Smiles.
lisa
Oh god I hope evolution doesn’t have a destiny…
powerful….
Hey, thanks for catching my typo. Now I can’t send you that bill. Since my poem had been up since Dec. 2003, I guess the typo was there for that long too. You were the first person to catch it.
I know you’re joking. You could never bludgeon a girl to death.
How was your weekend?
lisa
I tried to email you a cookie but it just crumbed up my account.
lisa
Very good poem! Thanks for coming by my site and leaving wonderful comments. It’s been a difficult time lately, but I’m getting over it now.
Peace.