April 29, 2005
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Miles Away
Another long, lonely night
400 miles from you
Pullin’ out of
Six hours overdue
Thinkin’ of you all the way
I’ll spend the night in
With whiskey to take it all away
Another long and lonely night
700 miles away from you
Snow as cold as your heart had grown
In that mountain pass the tears broke through
Well, I drove 700 miles today
I was thinking of you all the way
Felt
When I arrived at the Inyokern Café
Another long, lonely desert night
Since you went on your way
Things have changed but I remain
And the whiskey takes it all away
Comments (21)
Hey man, pass the bottle. I bet if we put our heads together we could find a rhyme for that 3rd stanza. How about “Mountain top so white it was blue”…? Or maybe “I crossed over but couldn’t get through”…? Sorry dude, I’m being uber critical tonight for some reason. What you said was fine and in a song, (which I’d bet big money this is), what you’ve written would sound just fine. Bythe way, how’d you like Inyokern? I’ve not only never been there, but never even heard of the place. Has a nice ring to it though.^_^
700 miles is a hell of a trip
14 or more hours for your mind to slip
and all of it passing in only one day
if it wasn’t for whiskey, it’d never go away
Dear Andreas,
The few songs I’ve written are country songs, since that is the music on which I was raised back in the 60s (at least until the Beatles happened). Your song is really fine. I’d change “Inyokern Cafe” which is probably a real name, to something more “country songy” like “Broken Heart Cafe”
Michael F. Nyiri, poet, philosopher, fool
Though it isnt your normal thing…I like it just as well! Sometimes it does wonders to step out of your style and try something new. Great job!
Theres nothing wrong with some country music here and there. I enjoy it alot…as I did this post. I have to tell you that your comment today made me laugh until I cried. You have the best sense of humor and express it very well in your comments. I really look forward to reading everything that you write. Thank you very much. You have become a treasured friend……….Kelly
Apparently your talent spans all genres…great read, I could hear it in my head.
and I had no issues with the “sex and booze” on my party last nite. Trust me, I laughed and smiled, and laughed some more..then went…hmmm….good point!!
I am always glad to see you on my site, you make me smile and leave such wonderful words behind. You can party at my “Xanga” anytime you want Andreas!
Much love,
SA
Hello my friend. Thank you very much for your input and suggestions. In no way does it overstep any bounds. I appreciate it. As I said once before my poetry is still in its juvenille stages and I know that I have much room to learn and grow. The thing that you said that really got me was when you said that I have been improving. Last night I read over all of my posts and I felt as if I was making progression. Its nice for someone else to tell me that so I know its not just me hoping. You are welcome to critique, comment, and share and thoughts with me at anytime. I truly look forward to them.
Now I have a question….I was going with a theme there….Echoes of you, memories of you, love of you, pictures of you…..everything was “something” of you….would it hurt that scheme if I dropped the “of you”s from some of the stanzas? I agree it did have a better sound with less words but would that have taken from the method? It may have been more noticeable had I skipped a space between every four lines.I would appreciate any feedback on this Andreas.
Thank you very much and the check will be in the mail first thing tomorrow morning…lol. I owe you alot and you have no obligation to even think about this as Im sure youre a busy man.If you find the time I would be ever so thank ful my friend. Have a wonderful weekend.
Couldn’t FIND my favourite country song…Tammy’s D-I-V-O-R-C-E from the album of the same name of course…also MY first album ever owned, but DO think you may get a kick out of my everGROWING *jukebox* in my “reviews” section…which is GEETAT heavy with the selections…ever heard of Link Wray???
This is one helluva great poem/song. It is my favorite Andreas.
I know a lot of people tell other people: oh, this is my favorite. But, this really really really is. It is fantastic. It needs to see print. You should compile two or three like this and send them out.
What I also adore about it, is the line: Things have changed. (A dylan song)
OH, you are right. I never even thought about Bruce. God! That is a bit freaky isn’t it? I actually just found out about two hours ago that I was going to see him. I bought Devils And Dust and it is very good. Nice listening.
I’m excited to go.
lisa
ha ha! I just discovered one of your pot shots!
Now I have to go discover if there are any others.
I bet you are a practical prankster! Poor maureen.
lisa
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ohman, I didn’t mean for it to do that! I mean it, you can delete it.
I feel so bad. I didn’t realize it would wreak such havoc. I guess next time I bombard you (oh, another b word) with B names I should utilize the space bar.
Really, I’m sorry. How annoying.
lisa
p.s. did you read it? ha ha. I snuck some additional phrasing in there.
Did you read mike’s comment on maureen’s site? He’s concerned about me.
He thinks you are a big old meanie.
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that was fun…i have to ask lisa how she got it to go all the way to the left of the screen….
spoken truthfully, the whiskey does indeed take it all away. cheers.
Holy macaroni batman it was hard reading this post with all the scrolling going on.
Hope you have a great weekend
jadey lynn
Hmmm. Duel. That sounds veeeeeeeeeeerrrrrryyyyyyy interesting.
very nice. fun, especially when you step outside your normal…
Thank you my friend.